Drew made a post about the popularity of different forms of mass media. I really like this discussion because he incorporated all types of media while focusing on the internet. He made generalization, then backed them up with facts from the class discussion. In order to convey his message, he said things about how long it may take something to get noticed but then the quick gain of popularity. This was a good way to convey his message.
I have one critique of this post. Within the post he had a lot of facts and support for his argument that didn't seem to flow. This sentence is an example, 'That [the increase of viewers] may seem like a big jump, but just 5 years later, there were over 500 million users, and a little over 10 years after that, 2.4 billion internet users.' This sentence seems to go on too long; however, that is a grammatical error not an informational flaw. The critique was the wordiness and unnecessary information. The reason I think this is not good is because it makes the reader confused and they have to go back and reread in order to discover what the original year was.
As a whole, I believe this post was very informational. It did a great job of showing the jumps between the years and popularity of the internet. It did use a lot information, but I that is easy to fix by just separating the years a little better. He made some great points and I think this is a very effective way to show the relationship between popularity and invention.
Here is a link to Drew's blog: http://alfrey99.blogspot.com/2013/10/class-talks.html
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